Saturday, 6 April 2013

Disastrous essays

In Section A of the exam, the students were asked to:

Write an essay on any one of these topics
A. Write about "My first day in Osogbo Grammar School"
B. What you want to become when you grow up

Out of about 120 students, I had 3 alright essays. I included one in this post. The kid who wants to be an architect.

Despite the instruction, some students wrote one crappy essay on each topic and I just rolled my eyes and picked one to mark. Some made no attempt to answer this section and the others.......see for yourself.

What I want to become when I grow up.
I will like to Become a pastor to bring many soul to Christ Jesus. So that They will Enter the kingdom of God, in other Not to go Enter hell fire.

My First day in Osogbo grammar school
My name is I***** A******. On this day I was very excited that I would enter into a new school. I came with my dad. When we entered the school we were told to collect number so that they can place us in class. I was place in Class B Firstly, we were taught English. I appreciated how they taught us because they taught us really well. I listened well in class and I understand what the teacher is teaching. I began to have friends. When it is break time we went out to go and play football, When we closed I went home. I like this school because they are good teacher to teach us.

Topic: What you want to become in future
I want to become an architect in future. An architect is a person who do the planning of a house, Or we can call it a building. An architect also draws how to design a house. After this, An architect hand over the drawning to a civil engineer. After, a civil engineer start the completment of the building. When you want to build, after buying some plots of land, you give it to the surveyors after that, the architect is the next person to take over the job.
When an architect works for a person who want to construct a big building, he is paid a large amount of money.
Any body is free to become an architect either male or female.
Without an architect, you can not be able to draw the planning and get the true design you want your building to be.
my reasons for Choosing architect is that, architect earns a lot of money.
I am truly proud to be an architect.

What I want to become when I grow up
I want become a medical doctor because I want to save life to treat people so that they can live healthy because This days There are know many doctor and many people dies because of small disease and I like science very much because I used to sick every month and where I go to hospital I see There dress with white and There cap. In Almight I will be medical medical. In shall ALLAH.

About my First day in Osogbo grammar school
My name is T*** O******, I live in Cele aubsuru
I want to write about my first day in Osogbo grammar school.
My first day in Osogbo grammar school it was a very happiness day for me because I think that my life have Change the primary schools and when I enter the School Compound it was a big school I am Very surprise because I did not it ever before and when I enter the class they group us to the Was So beautiful and we enjoy and we are feeling like not living and on that very we celebrate because the new life have started that day and it Was a Joyful day we all play together and when we close from school and we were happy to go home.

What I want to become when I grow up
first I want to become a doctor, I like doctor because. It is combined with my blood and my parent are also scientist I love my family because the all joined me in being a doctor.

What you want to become when you grow up.
My name is R**** A****** I want to become is a act If I was to a act I most read my Book
I most finished my scoredary school I most finshed my u.t (she made an attempt to spell university but decided to write u.t when she realized he couldn't spell university) and most obey mother and father and my teachers and other person befor I get to be act.


My first day in Osogbo grammar school
My name is A**** K**** I live on Osogbo I want to talk about my first day in Osogbo gramar school O.G.S. when I finsed my primary 6 and corrot my certificate and will arived in O.G.S and The name of my best friend He name was Ola and meet ourselfe in shool and will are best friend we wrote our book very well and read to pass our examlation We are good friend I am 11 years old and my friend was 11 years I always eat rice and Beans We are good friend and we pass our examination Amin.

What do you want to be one when you grow up
When I grow up I want to become a medical doctor in future that I will be Injecting many people, prescribed drug for people and operate people. (LMAO!)

Needless to say that my post was full of red underlined words and I had to fight autocorrect many times. *sigh*

~kdamsel~



2 comments:

  1. LMAO....this ur students self na die...... architect is a person who do the planning of a house, Or we can call it a building. An architect also draws how to design a house. After this, An architect hand over the drawning to a civil engineer. After, a civil engineer start the completment of the building. When you want to build, after buying some plots of land, you give it to the surveyors after that, the architect is the next person to take over the job.
    When an architect works for a person who want to construct a big building, he is paid a large amount of money.
    Any body is free to become an architect either male or female.
    Without an architect, you can not be able to draw the planning and get the true design you want your building to be.
    my reasons for Choosing architect is that, architect earns a lot of money.
    I am truly proud to be an architect.

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    1. Believe it or not, he actually wrote one of the best essays ...his essay is the 4th best one(I made a mistake in my post about his rank)...the other top 3's essays are too long and I can't imagine typing them all out. People would get bored reading the post.

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